It's not crap. It felt quite fresh in my ears, except that the main riff repeats a whole lot too much. That would get better with vocals over though. Not meant as an insult, but that would, with vocals on it, be playable on radio without a problem, IMO. The tone needs some work though, as you said.
I signed up and uploaded a little "tone sample" made with my Jackson plugged into my Boss GX-700, which has it's headphones jack plugged to the line in on my soundcard. I just improvised up 3 parts of it, first some heavily disted stuff, then some clean stuff, and then some "crunched" stuff. Then I played a part of Metallica's Master of Puppets, and then a part of Pantera's Cemetary Gates, from memory, so Ican't guarantee any correctness. And it's quite sloppy stuff, partially because it's improvised (or just from memory), partially because it's late at night here, partially because I'm not good with the guitar.
Anyone willing to guess 1) whether my guitar is a bolt on or neck thru and 2) what brand of pickups I use?
I also took the time to post my band's demo, consisting of 4 songs, rather poorly recorded and mixed, but always something. The darn mixer we used made it all sound very hollow, but whatever.
My tone sample is posted under the band name "GurrA" (which is categorised as Metal>Death/Black Metal as that is what I mainly listen to), and the rest is under "27 Stitches" (which is under Pop>Pop Rock, because that's what I'd call it). But I don't think the stuff shows up until someone there has checked it's not copyrighted stuff.